How Cambridge marks this narrative (30 marks):
- Content [5] — imaginative, well-developed ideas; characters shown through actions.
- Purpose & audience [4] — engages the reader; clear, consistent viewpoint; suspense.
- Text structure [5] — paragraphs structure the narrative; dialogue on a new line; good links.
- Sentence structure [5] — some complex sentences; varied connectives (although, meanwhile).
- Punctuation [4] — accurate sentences; commas; speech marks placed correctly.
- Vocabulary [3] — adventurous, precise words; some figurative language.
- Spelling [4] — mostly accurate, including ambitious words.
The automatic check below estimates four focuses (Purpose & audience, Text structure, Sentence structure, Vocabulary). Content, Punctuation and Spelling are assessed by a teacher.
Model continuation (opening lines): “Nobody moved. ‘Stay together,’ whispered Mr Okafor, although his voice was shaking. Slowly, a faint blue light began to glow around the corner, and I realised the footsteps had stopped…”
LO: 6Wt1 — plan plot, characters and structure effectively in writing an extended story (narrative / fiction, 0844 P2 Section B). Self-/teacher-assessed extended writing.